Persuasive+Writing

Our class is focusing on persuasive writing. This is my first piece of persuasive writing.
 * Persuasive writing is about convincing people and having an argument about what you think.

Little India is the best restaurant in New Zealand

Little India is easily the best restaurant in NZ because have you tasted the delicious Indian food they make. Also compare it to other Indian restaurants like Indian Aroma, Shamiana, South Indian restaurant and other indian restaurants. They don't have the secrets of 5000 years.

Moving on to other restaurants. Little India has much better food than English Restaurants like Lone Star, Cock & Bull, Breakers and Dennys because English restaurants have no spice in it so it tastes dry. Comparing Little India to other sorts of restaurants like Thai, Spanish, Turkish, Mexican, Italian, Morrocan, they don't have the magnificent drink called Mango Lassi. Mango Lassi is a thick mango drink.

There is also proof that Little India is the best restaurant because they won the best hamilton ethnic eatery award in 2007. Little India always passes the health and food test. Little India also do delivery or pick up so that is great. Guess what, Little India have advertisments on the radio, that is really cool.

So next time you don't want to cook go to Little India.

Reflection: I think I could of backed up my ideas much better. Although, I think my statements were good.

This is my second piece of persuasive writng. It is a letter on why our ski trip will be a worthwhile experience

**** Dear Parents or Caregivers Have you ever imagined what it would be like to ski the fluffy and frothy snow or even be touching clouds. The skiing trip is what we have all been waiting for and it is finally here. We are going to tell you why we should go to the skiing trip and what we will learn there, and what we need is your permission. This term Room 17 and Room 2 are going on a ski trip to Mt Ruapehu. We will be using a variety of skills within managing self, relating to others and challenging yourself. We will be organising the trip with a variety of skills and did I mention we will be SKIING!!! The skills we will be using within relating to others, managing self and challenging yourself are communicating with others effectively, earn each others trust and respect. We need to be open to new ideas and new ways of learning, active listening to discussions; we must respect each others ideas and be ready for any challenge that comes our way. There is also a lot more which we will be demonstrating on the ski trip. ** **<span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif"> We will be organising the ski trip by separating the class into groups that each have a responsibility. There will be budgeting money, food organising, accommodation organising etc.

The skiing will be very exciting because we will be at happy valley at Mt Ruapehu Whakapapa which will be a once and a life time experience. Skiing is a fun enjoyable time to spend with your friends and it is an experience that you don’t want to miss. So please let us go on this amazing once and a life time experience. Yours sincerely ** **<span style="FONT-FAMILY: Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive">Shaan & Damian

Goals: I need to back up my statements with clearer information and more reasons why I think that. I also need more detailed and clear main statements. **  <span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif">
 * <span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive">Parent Comment: I think for Shaan's first piece of persuasive writing about Little India, he has put forward positive statements of why he believes Little India is the best restaurant in NZ and then has backed it up nicely with why he believes that statement to be true. **  <span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS', cursive">**However, it is obvious some of these are biased opinions but he has done well to back up his opinions. For Shaan's second piece of persuasive writing I think he has done very well to argue the case that the ski trip will be valuable for learning life skills at the same time as having alot of fun. I am convinced the ski trip should go ahead!**

Through your paragraphs you are demonstrating some thought of cause and effect. You are giving evidence or listing ideas in each paragraph as to why people should agree with you. To make your writing more powerful you should give thought to linking these ideas through the paragraphs, include feelings, and bring in different perspectives i.e in Little India you deliver it from your perspective. Including the perspective of others will add value to your piece of writing. ** As an aside, where is your final piece and your self assessment rubric?
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